Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Some people believe showing people happy images pictures in which great achievements are made in helping the poor is more effective in encouraging them to take action to solve poverty than showing them | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people believe showing people happy images (pictures in which great achievements are made in helping the poor) is more effective in encouraging them to take action to solve poverty than showing them sad images (pictures that let us know how hard life can be for the poor).
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Although many parts of the world are industrialized, meaning people there can live prosperously, there are still countries and regions that are economically less developed. From my perspective, showing sad images of those places can effectively help fight against poverty there.

First, heartrending images display realistic pictures of people in need. People who can make meaningful contributions to the fight against poverty are generally from developed nations, growing up rarely facing any shortage of daily necessities. And this means they have relatively little first-hand experience about what problems are troubling people in poorly-developed regions. Thus, when seeing scenes depicting the happiness of poor people, they will not know why these people will need monetary aid or what kind of assistance they can offer. However, if images, albeit sad, can depict the sufferings of these poor people, those from wealthier nations can better understand their needs. For example, many people from western countries might not be aware of how drinking water can be a life or death matter troubling millions. But when seeing pictures showing people threatened by being unable to access clean drinking water or parched land associated with crop failures and famine, they would know the importance of funding irrigation facilities or water treatment plants for these people. Therefore, they would be more likely to make donations when they see the real threats plaguing those people in need.

Second, people are more able to empathize with sadness than happiness. Nowadays, most people do not face much adversity in their lives, making them relatively naïve in social experience in general. As a result, many criminals are taking advantage of this - many people are victims of internet fraud. So, when seeing charity photos showing how happy the poor are, people might become alert and question why these people will need any help. Even worse, they might need to pay for costly annuity or mortgage, meaning they would likely pity themselves instead of the poor. In this scenario, offering money to help others can be out of the question for them. However, humans are particularly willing to emphasize those living in misery. For instance, when many award-winning journalistic pictures depict how miserable lives can be in third-world countries, such as malnourished children in an African country. The reason these pictures are well-received can be self-explanatory - these pictures can move people. When there is empathy, people will be more willing to take charitable actions to fight poverty.

To conclude, sad images can display realistic challenges in poverty-stricken countries to call for help and are better able to inspire people’s empathy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...criminals are taking advantage of this - many people are victims of internet frau...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, for instance, in general, kind of, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 9.8082437276 275% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46135831382 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80924757183 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.9983508246 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.047619048 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3333333333 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224768678001 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0775142575994 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497050586094 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148080312048 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414861068838 0.0645574589148 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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