Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students can get as many benefits from organization or club activities as they can get from their academic studies.
In such a sophisticated world, people's attention to the necessity of starting such effort from an early age has increased since it has been widely considered to be a vital factor; thus, students have been concerned with the traits that pave the way for reaching success. The disputatious question which arises in this regard is whether students benefit from participation in organization or club activities like academic studies. Although some people are the leading opponents of this notion, I firmly concur with it. In what follows, I will elaborate on two reasons to elucidate my standpoint aptly.
First of all, should students be proactive in organization or club activities, it can lead to meeting some influential people. In other words, a huge benefit you receive from joining them is the people you meet and spend time with. In fact, the rapport you establish by participating in students' activities at the university provides you with invaluable advantages. Not only are they helpful in the present, but they are important for your future. It makes sense that these relationships become part of your network. Without a shadow of a doubt, you never know who may help you with landing a job or facilitating communication with influential people. Consider my personal experience as an example. When I was eighteen years old, I was elected as a student representative to supervise the university's services to students. In that position, I established a relationship with the university's president, who invested in my start-up last year. He facilitated the establishment of a pizza restaurant, which paved the way for reaching my goals. It tells us that establishing a relationship plays a prominent role in reaching success.
Second, it accomplishes the chief aim of universities. Indeed, it is to equip students with all required to take their places in adult society. It definitely is not stuffing students' heads which knowledge. In adult society, people need to join several groups to pursue their dreams. It would provide students with a good sort of preparation for this purpose. As an illustration, one can point out the recent and comprehensible study done at the Center of Educational Studies at the University of Tehran. Some eminent researchers have concluded that around 70 percent of students who were members of organizations or club activities could find investors for their projects sooner than other students. This shows us that participation in such activities are beneficial options.
To sum up, pondering all the aforementioned reasons, one can surmise that students benefit from organization and club activities the same as academic studies. It is because participation in such activities not only helps us meet essential people but also accomplishes the chosen goal of the university. Moreover, it is not the entire story, and there are some reasons that challenge the idea; hence, I recommend a survey evaluating the effectiveness of points is held. All in all, it is anticipated the number of students taking part in such activities will surge in the next decade due to the growth of public attention in this regard.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, may, moreover, second, so, thus, in fact, sort of, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2640.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18664047151 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10441668826 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538310412574 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0828922895 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7777777778 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8518518519 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25925925926 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275905516163 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065845853263 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713751528012 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169265735736 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113409188172 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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