Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Ordinary people always want to become elites showing on screen. however, there are some qualities obtained by successful people, which makes them differ from normal people. From my perspective, I believe the decisive point is that successful people are willing to try new things and take risks, while others only want to do what they know how to do well. my reasons are as below.
First of all, learning new things is so critical. because we are living in a fast-changing world, and every conception would develop. In order to cope with new situation, people should step out of their comfortable zone. it is a indisputable quality of successful elites or enterprisers. take bill Gates, the founder of well-known microsoft corporation, for example. Before he turned the microsoft into a successful commercial company, bill himself also began his career as a average software engineer. Fortunately, thanks to his consistent attempt in exploring new computer technology, he then made a first operation systems with graphical interfaces, and stood out his career and grabbed the every chance to establish his huge commercial empire. so, bill made his success because trying new things even with high risks.
Furthermore, things would change radically till we unable to do them well. With the advent of advanced technology, some complicated assignments would be eliminated or replaced by automatic machinery, such as typewriter. In the last century, people who master the using of typewriter had a high reputation and perfect salaries. but, as the computer becomes smaller, people tend to use this convenient machine rather than burdensome typewriter. Consequently, there is no typewriter worker any more. so, if we cannot predict the future trend, we better prepare to learn new talent constantly.
Admittedly, being proficient in particular area is also plausible. As for many elites, they are only good at one or few aspects. however, it is not contrary to trying new things and take risks. because even they skill at few aspects, they had spent lots of time and made numerous mistakes. but every time they failed, they would turn to other strange field, and began their career in order to seek opportunities. As a result, most of them made their success.
In a nutshell, for successful people, they like enjoy taking risks and step out their comfortable zone to make progress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, as for, for example, in particular, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17616580311 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80999126346 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585492227979 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.1747290192 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.92 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.44 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28153141121 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677999664805 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0803339770028 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14816084476 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721474979417 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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