Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made the world a better place to live. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The constant technological development of our society has helped people from all around the world to make their dreams come through. Personally, I think that modern technology embellish people`s lives. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, contemporary technology let people travel around the world. Only a couple of centuries ago opportunities for people to travel were limited. Indeed, some of them used horses to move from one country to another, when others, comuted by sea vasels. It was an incredibly exhausting and a time-consuming process. Nowadays, people have cars, trains, and aircrafts available in order to travel worldwide. Traveling is extremely fascinating activity, since it helps people to learn other languages and cultures, and to see a myriad of beautiful architectural facilities and amazing landscapes. My own experience is a great example for that. By my own vehicle, which is techlonologically advanced and equipped by a variety of devices such as GPS system, I travel a lot around the United States. During the journeys, I always open new for me places and meet new people, who introduce me to the American culture and facilitate development of my English. I doubt that I could have traveled as much, if I had no car. In this way, my automobile makes my life colorful and happy.
Secondly, by using modern technological devices, everyone is capable of staing connected to his family and friends all the time. Sell phones, laptops and tablets are amazing inventions of the mankind , which make possible a romout communication between people. It is especially important for the individuals who live far away from their loved ones. For instance, as I said above, I devote planty of free time to traveling in the Unites States. Therefore, a line`s share of my lifetime, I spend away from home. Moreover, originally, I am from complitely different country, so the majority of my family and friends are back in Russia. When I feel a damand in talking to them, I can do it at any moment, because I always have a smart phone on hand. With the help of that personal device, I am able not only to talk to the people I love, but also, I can share my pictures and videos from the places I have visited. To that end, the Even if I travel alone, I never feel lonely, since my phone keeps me connected with important for me people.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that technology has improved our lives on the planet tremendously. This is because, a variety of transportation help people enjoy travelling and plenty of electronic devoces let them communicate with others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92550790068 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96345391159 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575620767494 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1455318484 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.28 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.72 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0906448628539 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0259576264024 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270669118266 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653995333048 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155546533931 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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