Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Telephone has greater influence on people's lives than television has.
It is crystal clear that the advent of new technology in the field of communication has had a profound impact on the life of those that are exposed to it. Many people claim that the invention of the telephone was a revolutionary change. However, I firmly believe that mass media like television has a greater impact on people's lives because of its visual effects. The reasons in support of the idea are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First, people can be easily manipulated via television. In this era, different groups of stakeholders, from world leaders and decision-makers to multinational or even local businesses, are constantly in search of methods to influence people and brainwash them into believing what they want and benefit from. It is an old saying according to which people believe what they see. So, they try to depict what they want with the help of this media and make people have faith in it. For instance, once a soda company tried to mount its sale by embedding pictures of a man drinking it in the middle of scenes of a movie that was irrelevant actually to it. This scene was so short that most people even did not notice it, but the subliminal message was effective enough to thrust people into purchasing the drink after the movie. In other words, the impact of visual advertisement cannot be neglected, even on the subconscious level.
Moreover, repetition can play a significant role in convincing people and conveying messages. To put it differently, repetition is a form of learning. When a person is exposed to new information, at first, he/she may refuse to accept and believe it. However, when the information is repeated over and over again, the initial abnormality would wash off, and the person would come to the notion that what is said is true and believable. Mass media , specifically television, have paved the way for this kind of data transfer. As a personal experience, I have found myself buying a lot of stuff that was advertised successively on TV, which I initially thought were rubbish and unnecessary. Not only do business people benefit from this repetition that TV has provided, but also leaders and governors can benefit from it, too. To shed light on this issue, it has occurred many times that people may not be in favor of a specific policy, say increasing taxes, introduced by the government. But the government makes its way through people's disagreement by showing documentaries of how good this extra money can be put in use. At first, people may think that what is illustrated is not correct, but after it is repeated on television, people come to think that, "Yeah, that is right.", So they go with it.
To sum it all up, television can have conspicuous impacts on people's lives in several ways by presenting subliminal massaging and repeating information. Even when the data may not be correct, people would eventually get on board with it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, kind of, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8953722334 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88983730662 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517102615694 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0069243979 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.782608696 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6086956522 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151942464562 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451576094294 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425515605939 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112568124467 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367728126778 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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