do you agree or disagree with the following statement? television advertisement directed toward young children should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important programs in all countries that have negative impact on all people especially young children, because of its attractive design, is advertisements. Therefore, all people have always been trying to minimize time which they spend to watch advertisement programs. In this regard, some people believe that young children should not be allowed to watch TV advertisement that directed toward them. I agree with this view and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
These advertisements help young children to be happy. Such people wrongly believe that the colors and technics which have applied to make these advertisements had been chose by many experts who usually consider this fact that children have to watch programs that will make them happy, because happiness has positive impact on their lives. Therefore, these people have posed that parents should let young children watch these advertisement programs. In contrast, I disagree with this opinion, because advertisers' main purpose is gaining profits and young children cannot get their massage to buy things which they want to sell. Hence, advertisers do not consider young children when they want to design advertisement programs. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. He works as advertiser in one company in my country, once he told me that they always use all negative technics to persuade people to buy their products and they never think about positive things for children. Thus, advertisement programs have negative impact on children's lives.
Advertisement programs lead to destroy children's moral values. This topic has been discussed by several sociologists that the majority of them believe that because advertisers usually use lies to get their audience's attention, they will have negative impact on children's behaviors. In this regard, they believe that when young children recognize that these advertisements can get attention by unreal facts, they will mimic them in order to get more their parent's attention. Hence, these sociologists believe that we should not let children watch advertisement programs especially TV advertisements that directed toward young children. I agree with this statement, because young children's mind attract all things which they see very soon especially these advertisement programs that have attractive design for children. Bay way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics approximately all individuals who had watched these advertisement programs when they were young children, they are more successful layer. Thus, parents must not allow their young children to watch TV advertisement programs that directed toward children.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that TV advertisements directed toward young children should be not allowed. I argued that this approach is correct for a couple of reasons. First, advertisers usually don not consider young children and they always think about their profits, second, these advertisement programs have negative impact on children's moral values.
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Suggestion: chosen
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ative impact on childrens moral values.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.0286738351 254% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2731.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 491.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56211812627 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90184511548 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401221995927 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8335751128 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.739130435 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.347826087 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78260869565 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270299190511 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111129057913 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742060723586 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203125432213 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0104843601194 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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