Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a shadow of the doubt, television programs play a vital role in society. These programs cover different topics and can have both good and bad consequences. Some people contend that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed, while others assert it is not a big deal. Both of the opposing argumets appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point because the two groups have their reasons. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that young children should not be allowed to watch these programs. In the ensuing lines, I delve my reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that most of the time these programs contain violent and inappropriate scenes. So, they are not suitable to watche by children. For example, in television advertising for intorducing a new brand candies they used animation characters to make the advertising glamorous. As a result, there is a possible that children watch this program and absorb to eat unhealthy foods. Or even worse. I remember that last day, I saw a advertising that uses zombies and bloody scenes to introduce a new product. Imagine that watching this advetising by children can create what things? I really believe that we have to forbid watching these programs to our children to eliminatet the bad concequenses.
Another point springing to mind is that by watching these programs there is possible that we decrease our children's creativity. There is a correlation between watching TV by children and creativity. Recently, this concept was proved by researchers. Based on scientist's opinion investigation on this subject was hard and a good research would take decades. Also, finding people to take part was hard, but ultimately, researchers did it. The findings of this noteworthy study conducted on 10000 kids with different countries to avoid any bias demonstrated that kids who banned for watching people between the aged 2 to 5 will be very creative. So, I think kids should not be allowed to watch these nonsenses.
In a nutshell, to sum it all up, it is easy to see the advantages of forbidding children to watch useless TV advertising. They can be more creative. Also, watching these programs can have bad effects in their life condition. I hope someday we can do what is the best for kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, while, for example, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0303030303 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87180173046 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.035352909 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.68 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.84 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165304192034 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444474291868 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553729336444 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100685370807 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625985804498 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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