Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays the advertisers use every possible option to make their ads seen by the public. They just want to advertise, and they do not care which age they are or is it proper place to advertise or not. However, in my point of view, we should have strict rules of the viewing advertising be seen by the children who are between the ages of three to five. Which I will explore in the ensuing paragraphs.
First and foremost, while the children watch the ads at the age, it really affects them negatively and if they advertise a car, food or something suited for their age. Since they are not matured and can't understand many things in life. Nonetheless, their tendency is a lot towards many things. In fact they want to have what is being advertised on TV. For instance, ten years ago, when my brother was little kid, while watching TV I took him with me, and there was break on TV, he closely watched the ads, it was about a beautiful toy. As a result, when it was about that beautiful toy, so, he went crazy and was crying. Ultimately, few days later, I had to take him to a store and bought that for him.
Secondly, when the children watch advertises on a media they act very silly and become the kind of harsh and will take lives of some of the children. A compelling example of this could be my neighbors. Five years ago, there was advertisement of an action movie on Medias especially on TV. So few children of my neighbors watched the ad for a couple of times. The advertisement contained guns and fight against evils. Consequently, since here in Afghanistan everybody has guns at their homes. The children went to take the gun and tried to act as the characters of ad as good and bad guys. They each try to carry out their role. When they were divided into two groups, another group of them pull the trigger and open the fire against another that killed one and more than two of them injured. In fact, they learned it in a bad ways form an advertisement that was not right for them to watch.
As a conclusion, advertising is good for developing business and product. However, it should target specific ages -- younger or adults. The children at the ages of two to five are the core process of learning, and they learn most of their knowledge at this age of them. So it is vital that families and advertisers keep them away from being watched by children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, nonetheless, really, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45057471264 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4686774007 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526436781609 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6594441674 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.44 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169127383978 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503664593278 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0432616661446 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124761327473 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464689838862 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.88 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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