Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television is the major entertainment of most individuals in today’s progressive world. With the advent of new technologies and advertising in the mass media, it becomes a controversial subject of whether to permit the infant to watch the Television advertisings (TV ads). Although some people think that these programs improve children's visual skills, I strongly believe that parents should care about their young kids, and may not allow them to watch TV ads. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
Firstly, TV ads are full of inappropriate programs which advertise unhealthy food and snacks for children. We will expose the children to request unhealthy food if we allow them to see TV ads. Candies, chocolates, fried potatoes all are intriguing food with stimulating advertisements which youngsters want to eat them without any conscious about their disadvantages. As a result, we are responsible for feeding them healthy food like fruits and nuts, and unfortunately, TV ads do not include them. My younger sister is a compelling example of this reason. When she was three years old, she had watched TV cartoons too much, and among these programs, advertisements about candies had played. Therefore, she wanted candies all the time, and the more TV ads she saw, the more unhealthy foods she wanted. After two months, she became really fat, and her doctor told us we should have been cautious about her eating. He told us we had to prevent her from watching TV, especially commercials of candies and snacks. By eating harmful food, she became extremely fat that it causes another disease. A healthy diet including nuts and fruits, made her came back to standard weight.
Secondly, the TV advertisement consists of vain staff, and via watching these affairs, children do not learn beneficial skills. In fact, advertisements just let them snowed under with useless information, and take the time which may employ for learning new skills, like playing with the alphabet and counting. For instance, my three years old cousin has no permission to watch TV advertisements. Her mother plays games in which she is mastering kindergarten and improve her additional skills. Now she can count to fifty, although she is only three years old girl. Had my aunt entitled her to watch TV ads, she could not be able to count in this age.
In conclusion, I strongly believe parents should control their children over TV advertisements. This is because managing infants not to watch TV advertisements not only does eliminate harmful and unhealthy food advertisements which tempt children to eat them but also lets them use the needed time to learn new skills which improve their intellectual ability.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11135857461 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88929816885 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550111358575 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.185879851 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.7826086957 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122742027582 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402093185254 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0305303983407 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870622628193 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257712965888 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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