do you agree or disagree with the following statement? television advertisement directed toward young children should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Improvements of technology during last decades, have had many positive impacts on our lives but came along with some problems too. Nowadays, television advertisement is widely widespread and almost every company use this method to enhance its sell. companies selling products related to children are not an exception and many of their advertises are made to adress the children. In my point of view, these advertises should be monitored and controled, mainly because of the following reasons.
First and foremost, to many of these companies, it is not important what offensive lessons our child learn watching their advertises. To make my point clear, assume an advertise showing a scenic family, the father notices that child's diaper should be changed and siply asks the mother to change the diaper and then the child will be happy with the new diaper. it may encourage our child to have that diaper but it is not the only message he delivered. he also noticed that father did not changed his diaper and it was kind of the mother's duty. these and other similar messages, will make him think that mothers always have to do clean and do house works while fathers are resting all the time. it is obvious that we do not want these toughts in our family, especially when most of the mothers are working outside just like the fathers, in our modern societies.
Moreover, in these advertises lifes are shown extremely fancy and a young child can not understand differences between the real life and what he watches from television. he would want that luctury toys, always laughing family and maybe the pets. Although, many families can not afford these things and have already many problems providing the basic necessities for their child so they will have to reject their child request for having that toys and other stuff many times which may lead to having psychological damages to their child.
Taking these reasons into accoun, I believe that television commercial can have a positive influence on our child too but they should be controled.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00290697674 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46016808116 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575581395349 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3154523809 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.928571429 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11992134473 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467902719688 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454248709152 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880101265804 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522981867433 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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