Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the last few decades, popularity of television has grown as well as its effect on society. Personally, I believe that television produces a negative effect and breaks links in the interaction between people. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, television represents an enormous distraction in people. Shows and programs in the tv are so attractive for the audience that they make people spent a lot of time watching them. This time might have been used to interact with friends and relatives. My own example is a compelling example of this. To illustrate, when I was a child I used to watch a lots of movies on the television. What is more, I did not want to miss any of the night shows I liked in that time. As a result, there was not enough time for me to talk to my parents at night when they came from their jobs. Even though they were interested in knowing how my day at school had gone, my mind was focused on the television.
Secondly, some programs are models of negative behaviors and thoughts. To be more specific, violent scenes and sensitive characters might be easily copied by children as well as by adults. More importantly, these attitudes might attack the desire of being social. For instance, my little cousin watched so many violented movies and shows in which a character’s friend did not love him and was false with him, so my cousin also thought their friends did not love him. Consequently, he became solely and did not want to greet his classmates at school because of the feeling of having false friends in his life. Moreover, he did not even want to go his soccer practices due to that feeling.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that television is a horrible influence for relations with familiars and friends. This is because it is a huge distractive item and it transmits terrible ideas to audience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...ate, when I was a child I used to watch a lots of movies on the television. What is mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69047619048 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71600170277 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565476190476 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.192788924 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9473684211 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6842105263 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.63157894737 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.090390550741 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0289381980115 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347787334229 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551318440729 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0112935577783 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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