Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should spend more money on improving facilities (eg. labs and general equipment) than on hiring famous professors.
University, as we all know, for the majority of people is one of the most important parts of life. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find this contention sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that instead of hiring famous professors, universities should spend more money on improving facilities. I believe that alongside education, students need to feel fresh and also need to be familiar with the applicability of their lessons. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason which makes me hold this belief is the necessity of having entertainment. Undoubtedly, facilities such as gym, Cinema, and theater on campus bring fresh feelings for students and provide them better efficiency; since having fun is a crucial factor in reducing the stress level. The less stress a student has, the more productivity shows in her school. In an experiment that had been conducted about this issue, about which I have recently read an article, the results showed that students who tried entertainment facilities had shown better performance in their school`s scores in comparison with the time when they did not use any facilities. Moreover, results also had shown that the average level of depression among students noticeably reduced, and it suggested that it is the outcome of providing the facilities. Therefore preparing circumstances which can help students to reduce their tension will be useful both for university and students.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the applicability of lessons. Alongside theoretical methods of teaching, there is an indispensable need that requires students to know how to apply their knowledge in the real world. Although hiring famous professors assumed as an excellent opportunity for students, but if it does not bring practical teaching, it would be out of value. Indeed, universities` money should equally spend on hiring and using the best facilities. Take my personal experience as an example, several years ago, when I was graduated from university, I had a problem with finding a job; because each organization believes that the lessons I had passed in university not applicable, and I should pass a training course for achieving my favorable job.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks we can safely conclude that spending money on facilities not only is beneficial for students but also advantageous for universities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 841, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...he outcome of providing the facilities. Therefore preparing circumstances which can help ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2115.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39540816327 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0892920339 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579081632653 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3880463356 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.411764706 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141170441289 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470018756505 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.07379473666 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927808052703 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373900486887 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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