Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should choose a job that is similar to what their parents did.
In the modern era, due to the complexities of societies, having a job plays an important role in people’s lives. In this regard, people have always tried to take some measure to be able to get a decent and well-paid job. Some people possess the conviction that it is more prudent course of action for young people to follow their parents’ job. I personally take the view that choosing your parent’s occupation is a good idea. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
First and foremost, parent have enough and valuable experience in their own jobs, which means they can transfer that to their children. There is no disputing the fact that lack of job experience is the biggest obstacle for young people to find a job. Parents can help their children put their theoretical knowledge into action by teaching them. My own experience is a case in point. When my father was young, he studied computer engineering in a well-known university in our country. As time elapsed, he was capable of gaining enough experience, and after that, he could land a decent job in a big company. When I wanted to enroll in university, he insisted on choosing computer engineering, and I accepted. After graduation, due to the fact that he was an experienced and knowledgeable engineer, I asked him different questions when I faced various difficulties. Then, I could get a money-making job in a big corporation. Had my mother not had enough experience, I would not have been able to learn different things. Thus, I could not find a good job after graduation.
The second noteworthy reason to be mentioned is that parents have made some professional connections and networks during their working life. It goes without saying that the more connection a person has in working community, the more they can help their children to find a job. In other words, parents who know many people in different companies, can ask them to provide their children with the golden opportunity to get a job. Therefore, they children will have less stress owing to the adverse economic climate. In the research conducted in my country in 2020, the factors that affected the people’s chance to get a job position were analyzed. The results revealed that there is a positive correlation between the size of people’s professional network and their children’ chance to find a job position. Their children did not encounter any challenge in careers, nor did they experience any stress.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that it is more reasonable for young people to choose a job that they parents had in the past. The reason for this is that Not only will children have more chance to be knowledgeable in the view of the fact that parents are able to transfer their experience to them, but also their parents have more professional connection and can help their children to land a decent job. However, that was a story in a nutshell; actually, there are some other reasons and examples, which are not mentioned above. Finally, it is suggested that parents encourage their children to choose their jobs as their future career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 138, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
... young people to choose a job that they parents had in the past. The reason for this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, in short, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2665.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90791896869 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83876246875 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458563535912 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1993550903 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7037037037 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25925925926 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261586777534 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793281645546 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667331434139 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18407290146 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335778822803 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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