Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
At every turn of each individual life, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of have a good finance responsibility. Some people argues that children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite opinion. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will explain my reasons to justify my points of view.
As the first and paramount reason, I think that children are able to understand how manage their own money. In other words, these people can learn valuable experience of finance with their parents and also they can develop knowledge to achieve their future and personal objetives. Take my experience as a compelling example. When I was a child, my family taught for me basic concepts and ideas of financial responsibility. As a result, I achieved my goals in my life. For example, I bought a house and a great car. If I had not have learned this principles of finance, nor could I buy a house neither could I achieve my personal objectives.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that, children who have comprehension of finance will not depend of their parents in the future. Hence, these people will not have stress and worries caused by the lack of money. For instance, research conducted by some masters economy students shows that a person who have a responsible finance have less mental disease, such as depression. Consequently, a person with a great economy independence can have a better lifestyle than a person who does not have it.
In conclusion, take the above reasons into account, I strongly believe that children are able to understand the importance of financial responsibility, because it not only open up a whole gamut of advantages, but also help them to prevent a bad lifestyle in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1620.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86486486486 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83650762474 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552552552553 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6641560602 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2941176471 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5882352941 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180544630406 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621576854338 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102010278675 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107739948162 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.068230261297 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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