Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Tv programs and movies have tremendous leverage on our quotidian routine life. It influence in a direct and intengible way. It is utterly important to appreciate the effects of these program because of the indelibelimpact on the society. Although some people hold the viewpoint that TV and movies play apivotal role in taking out the stress and make us feel better especially after a long hard days. However, others may hold a different intellect and disagree with this notion. My personal and actual observation of life wjich had led me to agree with the idea that TV programs and movies have more withdrawal than benefit impress. In the following essay, I shall delve into must outstanding reasons.
To commence with, many programs enchourage to pursue unhealthy or even unaproperiate behaviour. Indeed, thes negative effects will have more impact if done by our role model such as special actor or our fance singer. For instance, during one of my daughter's favoriate program show, the actor appears to each fast food everyday, this effects my daughter and thought these type of foods are the best. She buy the same food that the actor eat it everyday. Furthermore, she spend a lot of many on it. Eventually, this led her to suffer from obesity. Apparently, it must be taken into account that following the same bad practice that shown on TV or movies, helps to increase certain unhealthy behaviour and cause many medical problems.
In addition, many people try to imitate their favorite shows or movies exactly as it appear. Hence many of them carry a message of violence, our young people will practice them in the life. Foe example, my nephew use to watch Jacky Chan movies and he try to follow his movement as it seems in this actor's series of show. Once, he practice the same movement for his little four years old sister and cause her serious injuries because he use knives as the actor use. Immediately, we transfer her to the hospital and with GOD's care, the doctors could stop the bleeding and save her life. In view of the fact that without watching movies that encourage of violence and have some aggressive shows, certainly no one will try to practice it in the life.
To sum up, after contemplating the reasons that I mentioned before, taking all the factors into consideration, I would reinforce my idea that Tv programs and show have more negative impact on youth because they imitate their role mode when they practice bad habits during the show and the movies advocate for violence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, for instance, in addition, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83953488372 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5425412395 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553488372093 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5253508677 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0952380952 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183519596983 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0490890133707 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342337807094 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107574623752 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396345083515 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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