Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and television are so common in this era that almost everyone has seen them. Discussion now centers on whether they are relatively negative to the way young people behave. In my opinion, I would agree that, in general, their positive effects are more significant than the negative impacts on young people’s behaviors. I feel this way for three main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, one of the reasons why positive influences of movies and television are more than negative ones on how the young behave is that when we are watching movies or television, it is natural to stepped back and think about our own lives as outsiders. What it means is that we can always find ourselves in movies or television. And only in this way can we rethink our behaviors clearly, which can contribute to our good self-modifications. For example, the young people could learn that emotion is much more important than money from watching too many such stories about love and bread presented in movies and television. Because even if romantic stories are different, they will make you think that which one you will choose if you were the character and the results behind the choices, which will make them treasure their relationships much more. Thus, this evidence highlights that movies and television make the young people observe themselves objectively, which is an enormous advantage to their behaviors.
Another reason for this is that they are more impressive and influential than any other thing on the way young people behave. This is because movies and television are so easy to understand and so visual. For instance, it is very normal for a 6-year-old boy to watch movies or television and basically understand them when books or lectures always make them confused. Therefore, movies and television can influence the young people deeply and unconsciously, which is one of the best ways of education.
On the other hand, those who are against these ideas may claim that movies and television could teach the young bad actions because they usually do not have enough discernment to determine which is right and which is wrong. They may have a point in thinking like that. However, what is also worth noticing is that it is also a good chance to improve their abilities of making judgement, which is a fun way to conducting moral education. Given this, movies and television generally play active roles in the young people’s behavior education.
To conclude, the essay discussed that movies and television have less negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave for three reasons: they give us an outside perspective to reflect on our behaviors; the moral function of them is deep and irresistible; they could help young people form a ability of judgement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 312, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ible; they could help young people form a ability of judgement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in general, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2365.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02123142251 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71891390475 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47983014862 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 737.1 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2549556035 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.473684211 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7894736842 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57894736842 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331290772451 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107184034091 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756134677394 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211187367321 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607374722345 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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