Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
Television advertising is one of the effective means for saling products. We can easily see celebrities drinking a specific brand of drinks or commercial telling people cereals are great for health. However, there are some people begin to question that if it it appropriate for some people, especially for those who have age less than five.
Kids are not like us, neither of their brain functions nor their minds are mature. They tend to believe what they saw or what grown-ups told them. And sometimes, it is dangerous for them to believe something that is not real. Children would possibly find it hard to differentiate the reality and the fantasy, which could leads to misleading of their knowledgement. For example, when Superman flying in the sky, holding bag of candy and told us that it is what gives him the ability to fly in the advertisement. Kids would think that if they eat the same kind of candy, they can have those super powers, which is not exist, of course.
Moreover, in some extreme circumstances, if kids believe they can fly without any instruments, they could fall from the roof trying to use their invisible wings to fly in the sky. And there are cases everyear in the United States. To avoid the tragedy from happening, there must be some kinds of signs to warn these kids that they can not do this at their home without any help of adults.
Also, advertisement could sometimes do harm to children's health. For example, in order to sale fast food, Mcdonald's brands their stores as a playing field for families. when kids saw the commercial, they tend to imagine how happy they could be in the playground whithin mcdonalds', drinking coke and eating high calories burgers. And these brings to severe fat issue of children, which could deffect their intellegent and the ability of focusing.
Due to the reasons above, it is not hard to see how television advertising could harm the children in many aspects. Advertisement should be banned from the children less than five, or at least some warnings should be presented following the advertisement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, at least, for example, kind of, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85352112676 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6475936307 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538028169014 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.876001765 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7222222222 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121979707201 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0435748743337 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655026379898 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876170972544 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890922082604 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.