In this hectic era, people usually face with lots of unsolvable problems, which may decrease their power for continuing their lives. One of the ways to prevent this phenomena form occurring is creating bonds, in which people should learn and obtain skills to make friendships with each other and having fun to have better happiness in order to living better. When it comes to this point, many people want to know whether creating bonds with new people weights more than maintaining old relationships or vice versa. I personally concur with continuing old friendships. In what follows, I will delve into couple of reasons to shed light on my response.
First reason that comes into my mind is that old friendships are more valuable. Undoubtedly, the more the time people spend with each other, the more the convince between their communications. As a result, not only do they know more about each other but also, they rely more. Most of people believe that trust values more than anything in their relationships. Actually, never can friendships be continued without trust. As I remember, having entered new school, called Shahed, I created a bond with one of my classmates, named Mahdi. He was a quite simple guy, who always talked with me about everything. After couple of years, I felt that the trust which there is in our relationship, cannot be repeated again. Now, whenever I want to tell one of the most valuable events in my life, I would tell being friend with this guy.
Second, should the ability to maintain friendship with small number of people over a long period of time is more essential for happiness, they have been tested more than who comes for short spans. In general, there are lots of test during each relationship, and both passing and failing in these tests show the attitudes of each sides of friendship. In relationships, which take for long time, these tests occur more often, and both sides of these friendships can better know each other. Never do I forget those days, in which Mahdi and I examined each other as much as we could. It does not mean that we cause some events then waited for the other to how he reacted. Actually, it means that being thankful to our long period relationship, the events occurred themselves and we just remember how the other side reacted whenever those special events happened. In relationships with new people, these tests take long time to appear. Thus, people cannot be aware of the results. Having many friends, whom have been tested and passed the exams, directly connects with people's mood so then their happiness.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that maintaining friendships with people over a long period of time is more important for happiness. It not only counts as one of the most valuable issues in everyone's life but also, makes everyone be aware of their friend's past and the exams s/he passed before. I strongly propose that people should put their energy to maintain their old friendships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...their lives. One of the ways to prevent this phenomena form occurring is creating bo...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... people spend with each other, the more the convince between their communications. As a resu...
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...ut each other but also, they rely more. Most of people believe that trust values more than any...
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Message: Use simply 'repeated'.
Suggestion: repeated
...there is in our relationship, cannot be repeated again. Now, whenever I want to tell one of th...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...with small number of people over a long period of time is more essential for happiness, they h...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ing friendships with people over a long period of time is more important for happiness. It not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87573964497 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55793066941 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497041420118 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2373915874 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0769230769 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316037058433 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896996556992 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0885146643291 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202662134158 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199980818067 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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