Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family is not as important now as before.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It has been suggested that we should keep in touch with the extended family as our grandparents did before however I personally think that it seems quite hard to have relationship with our relatives today as our parents did because, we live in such a globalized society and hectic life.
To begin with, these days, most people do not live with their family for educational or occupational purposes. Students have great opportunities to study abroad around the world if they want. Moreover, they are able to apply in foreign companies if they are willing to. Therefore, family members are difficult to gather in their daily lives so that it is much harder for relatives to meet even in monumental days like thanksgiving or Christmas. For instance, my elder sister went abroad when she was in an elementary school. She studied hard and got a prestigious job in Canada. After all, she has been working in Vancouver with her husband who is working together in the same company. My sister always wants to meet family but the airplane ticket is so expensive that she only can come to Korea for twice a year. In this reason, my sister feels uncomfortable if she should see relatives. She barely contacts relatives unless there are special occasions.
Secondly, people in this era experience the most hectic life style, compared with previous ones. It seems that family dinner is the most difficult thing. For example, both parents work every day and there are some days that they must go to work in weekends. Most teenagers should go to private institutes for extra studies to go to prestigious universities. In addition, university students are eager to experience as many things as possible by taking company internships, doing volunteer works, and getting part-time job to afford their tuitions. So, for these reasons, we spend less time together with our family and relatives, which means less involve in each other’s lives.
To sum up, it is so sad that we grew apart from our relatives, even our family. However, we should keep in mind that although it is inevitable phenomenon, we must try our best to keep in touch with our beloved family.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, after all, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92876712329 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66121197295 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572602739726 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.591862655 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6842105263 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78947368421 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0880654900156 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267408500493 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321052473367 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0532659979985 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222913592111 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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