Celebrities’ life is always paid a lot of attention by people. Their opinions about different things often presented in discussions which shows their thoughts are important for people. However, I think young people care about their opinions more than older adults. Young people follow entertainer’s and athletes’ life in magazines, on media, internet and social networks. Furthermore, most of the audiences of sport’s competitions, concerts and entertainment TV programs are from young generations.
Young people are more interested in celebrities’ life and opinions. Almost all the people who I know that try to wear clothes like celebrities, get a haircut like them, read about their opinions about a specific subject or event and know how their daily life is look like are young. In different discussions, I only hear from a young people to say something according to a celebrity’s quote and debate the subject using that reference. For instance, last week I went to a baby shower party. At the beginning of the party everybody was talking about a name for the baby. Most of the young couples suggested names of famous actors and singers. On the other hand, the baby’s grandparents though the baby should be named to a hero or a generous man in their family.
When I go to different concerts, I see most of the audiences are young. Most of the people in sport studio’s which I watch on TV are young too. In addition, most of the celebrities are young themselves. So, I believe famous entertainers and athletes are watched by young people more than old people. As a result, young people know about their life, their reactions in different situations and their ideas more than older people. I think older people don’t pay attention to their opinion because they are usually younger than them. Thus, it seems they have more experience about living and their opinions are more valuable for themselves than the opinions of young athletes and celebrities.
As I percept every day, young people pay attention to a famous person like an actor/actress, a singer, a soccer player, an Olympic medal winner, etc. more than elderly people do. They pursue celebrities’ opinions around different subjects and sometimes try to follow their way of thinking and living.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, so, thus, for instance, i think, in addition, talking about, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.176 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07713690881 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.4184195138 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2272727273 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59090909091 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193589850651 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732362406791 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695247252651 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14171362198 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506812944177 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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