Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive world where we live, people in particular youngsters are busy with numerous problems which are time-consuming. In this regard, some people believe that young people do not have sufficient time to spend to help their communities; meanwhile, others disagree, and they hold the opinion that young people have enough time to aid their communities. From my perspective, I concur with the former group, in what follows, I will elaborate on the most standing reasons.
First and foremost, nowadays, young adults become egotist, and they prefer to spend their time for themselves rather than helping their communities. Youngsters these days, just thinking about the result of their work, if it has a positive effect on their life, they will spend their time; otherwise, they will not help anybody. Young adults are raised in a welfare lifestyle that their parents provide everything they need in life, so they become ambitious. Consequently, young people nowadays cannot understand other issues to sacrifice themselves or their time in order to help their communities. For instance, last week, I read an article about the people supporting their community to solve the problems. The researcher’s result was so compatible with my claim that these days adult do not help their society. The author's research topic was about the age range of those people attending to help organizations, which was more than 40 years old or so. The author said that those people who care about their community and spend time for that were the past young people who become older now. As a result, today's young people will not dedicate time to help others. However, this manner was more prevalent in the past time.
Secondly, the young span, nowadays, become sophisticated than the past as competition among them augmented, so young people have less time to help their communities. People are hard-working now to achieve the best things in the world, such as the best job, house, car and so on. Hence, since they want to climb the ladder of success, they should try hard to be a breakthrough. Consequently, young people do not have enough time to help their communities. Even if they find the time, they prefer to allocate to their family or go to travel due to relax their minds and come back to their works energetically. For instance, as I desired to be a research scientist in the computer science major, which is other youngsters sought-after for it, I allot all of my time to learn the most practical programming, which is very time-consuming. Since I spend my time paving the path of success, I do not have enough time to meet my family. As a result, if I find any time, meeting my family is my initial priority. I believe my peers’ lifestyle is not distinct.
To wrap it up, having all the aforementioned reasons into account, I do believe that young adults do not asset enough time to help their community. Not only do they become egotist, and they want all the bests for themselves, but they also are busy to accomplish their works to achieve their goals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2544.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89230769231 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72951217004 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455769230769 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5180062051 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301946436502 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109443710967 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872603376424 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22223614623 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0204713984244 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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