Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Since there are more and more competitions in the today's society which make the future of society complex, someone states that young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society. However, from my perspective, I regard such statement as a evidence of oversimplification and extremity.
First, I need to confess that young people today indeed have less experiences when compared with older ones. As we all know, many of the critical decisions are made from the judgements based on people's experiences. For example, since young people are short of practices in some specific fields such as literacy, politics, and art, they might be unable to make important judgements in those areas. As a result, young people might not influence the development in such traditional fields.
However, no one can deny that the future of society must contain tremendous new technologies, which may ask for brilliant and creative thoughts. Moreover, although young people may not obtain enough knowleage in some traditional fields, they have lots of potentials in the creative fields such as the development of new technologies. Take the famous entropreneur, Jack Ma, who is the CEO of TaoBao, as a concrete example, he had many ingenious ideas when he was young, and he strived to make such ideas into reality, which eventually were turned into the hottest online purchasing application in the world. The success of Jack Ma demonstrates the creative thoughts of young people are indispensable for the future development of technologies. Therefore, young people definitely can offer important helps in determine the future society.
In a nutshell, although young people do not have enough experiences compared with older ones, they exactly act an important role in the future and have a lot of huge influences on the decisions that dictate the future of society due to they have myriad creative thought which are significant to critical parts of future's society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...e are more and more competitions in the todays society which make the future of societ...
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Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...perspective, I regard such statement as a evidence of oversimplification and extr...
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Line 5, column 62, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun experiences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ess that young people today indeed have less experiences when compared with older on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26875 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92486644994 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1443786736 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.5 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6666666667 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37320251937 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142506233054 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109990781642 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26012840491 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0816764615187 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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