Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That young people have different influences in the decisions of society for future is an undeniable fact. Should we realize some of the direct and indirect effects of juveniles in the decision-making process of government we will ponder over these influences much more scrupulously. Whether youth do not have role in the societies’ future programs and decisions have recently been the topic of debates among sociologists in Europe. I do believe that juveniles play a crucial role in the future of societies and therefore government's decisions, they cause governments to consider some requirements for education of them in different levels of lives,they have influence in defining variety of products or manufactures to be made or imported in country, in spite of the fact that they cannot participate in social attendances like elections,these are my justifications.
To begin with, children and new generation with their needs designate the government's program and policies toward them. Children need good education with high quality internet or with highly technological equipment like laptops and other electronic gadgets. They need to have recent electronic educational tools in learning materials like video projectors in classes. Since they are potential power of future society and they need high quality education to prosper in future they smoothly effect the decisions of governments toward investigations in their education.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that their interests and attitudes toward some products hugely affect the policies of countries in manufacturing or importing them in future. For example nowadays children's playing habits changed significantly. They prefer to play video games. All of the children in school age have tablets or smart cellphones. With this high demand for technological products government decide to make possible the access of children to these products easier. For example in our country government is negotiating with Apple Company to have their market legacy in here in order to use their costumer services. Because of prohibitions by national countries we cannot access the costumer services of huge companies. Therefore demands of children and young people effect the whole government's future policies in this way.
By taking all above mentioned arguments the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue. Underestimating the influences of young people in decision-making process of societies for future is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to understanding these influences precisely and can improve several aspects of wrong viewpoints about this issue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, therefore, for example, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59068627451 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12000369526 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519607843137 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.7889317871 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.052631579 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217761821007 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732002696823 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695180395057 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131292063144 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418464803206 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 58.1214874552 57% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 10.9000537634 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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