Do you agree or disagree in the statement if people have opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a jab that would be more satisfying.
Undoubtedly, human beings are finding positions that lead them to the ideals and desires of their life. Without any shadow of doubt, selecting a proper job is a key element of success and achieving to the zenith of progress according to the human's responsibilities, personality, and their study fields. With this in mind, an important controversy exists as to whether or not people should select a secure job without any waiting for other jobs opportunity. While, some accept that it is logical option to a person to be engaged in a secure job, others think otherwise. As far as I am concerned, the latter one is a good choice for quite a few reasons, three obvious ones of which are explained upon hereunder.
Although it may seem that choosing first job based on securing quality will bring more money or other improvements, it can adversely affect one's upcoming positions. Selecting a job without any considerable attempts encounter people with irrecoverable problems such as important less evidences of modifying in the job, financial problems, finding depth conflictions with his or her colleges, name but a few. In addition, due to non-adaptability with the bosses and managers in the work place, his or her thought will be affected and faces with difficult situations in communications with the friends and family member. With high probability, the roots of these problems may be in less efforts in reaching to the appropriate job. In contrast, those of people who spend their time and energy to find a job with their personality and behaviors pave the way to obtain their desires and ideals in the future life.
In the other points of view, taking a job according to the penchant play a significant role in a person's life to experience a comfortable and without tension in today's world. Inasmuch as their job is based on their desires and interests, they can enjoy from the blessing of the nature and behave with their surrounding phenomena intellectually. However, those of persons who have found their work in easy way, in near future afflict from mental and psychological pressures so much so that this huge world with various inherent aesthetic become a place with a lot of restrictions. On the other hand, it is statistically proven that the majority of social dissonances has its origin in depressions caused by job dissatisfaction.
All in all, achieving to the success and improvements needs to commitment of all factors in the life. It has frequently observed that a small flaw in one part lead whole system to the failure and confers it with irreparable detriments so that probably change the direct of life. Bringing some advantages without taking into hardship does not usually guarantee the prosperity of a person in the upcoming events and moments.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...n mind, an important controversy exists as to whether or not people should select a secure job witho...
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Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...one's upcoming positions. Selecting a job without any considerable attempts ...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun evidences is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rrecoverable problems such as important less evidences of modifying in the job, fina...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun efforts is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
..., the roots of these problems may be in less efforts in reaching to the appropriate ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258188824663 0.229887763892 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.115606936416 0.158761421928 73% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102119460501 0.0866891130778 118% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0308285163776 0.046263068375 67% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0443159922929 0.0685040099705 65% => OK
Prepositions: 0.148362235067 0.118717715034 125% => OK
Participles: 0.0500963391137 0.0351676179071 142% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.03741132317 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Infinitives: 0.028901734104 0.0309702414327 93% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.109826589595 0.0887237588012 124% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0134874759152 0.0209618222197 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00770712909441 0.0139019557991 55% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2803.0 2387.08602151 117% => OK
No of words: 463.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.05399568035 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36717062635 0.338922669872 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.2656587473 0.251872472559 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.196544276458 0.174417080927 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.144708423326 0.112833075102 128% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03741132317 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552915766739 0.524397521467 105% => OK
Word variations: 66.5973255274 59.2087087015 112% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 27.2352941176 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3668277888 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.882352941 120.699889404 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2352941176 20.5533526081 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.705882352941 0.644075263715 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 53.8011688477 45.7405998639 118% => OK
Elegance: 2.39393939394 1.45489161554 165% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235844849401 0.300154397459 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104046103708 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0584549781805 0.0752933317313 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.536903220333 0.497263757937 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.111022614412 0.151897553556 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108000496572 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438273424623 0.0781384742642 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.459849954745 0.336927656856 136% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0470697321117 0.067059652881 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175338756934 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255479156581 0.0618886996521 41% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
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Rates: 86 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26 Out of 30