Does our cloth affect the way we behave?
Nowadays, the appearance of people plays a vital role in the society. It is not acceptable for a vast rage of people, but most of the people judge other through their appearance. By the way, some people think that appearance does not influence the behavior, but others do believe. In my opinion, the appearance is the most important thing that can strongly effect our behavior.
First, our mind forces us to behave in the suitable way that we dress. The mind has some rules for itself. We have been brought up with some cultural principle and our mind is full of these rules and decides in a preordained way. For example, all of us know from our childhood that if a person wants to go climbing should wear some special kind of cloth or a manager should always wear a suit. Based on these kinds of principle in our mind, when we decide to wear a suit, unconsciously our mind forces our body to be firm, walk straight, laugh little and etc. These changes happen in most of the people because we grow up in a similar disciple and live in a similar society. Therefore, I do believe that the way we dress affects all parts of our boy and consequently our behavior.
Second, people treat us in a completely different way as we change our cloth. As it was mentioned before, our mind is limited to some rules. Therefore, people behave in a way that they think is deserved. They treat scornfully when they visit a thief, they are frightened when they saw somebody with prison cloth and etc. For instance, last week I watched a clip on the internet. It was from a hidden camera and was recorded to demonstrate exactly the different behavior of people in visiting a person with different clothes. There was a girl at the age of around 6 or 7, at the first time the girl was dressed with torn, dirty cloth like a very poor child that all of us have seen them in various part of the city. She entered to a restaurant and just went near the table of people who were eating. All the people treat in a way that she is a thief, hungry girl and they tried to get rid of her. After that, the girl changed her cloth and became like a prance. Now, when the girl came back there, all of them laugh, gave her some food, and played with her. However, she was the same girl and did the same thing.
In sum, the way we dress influences our behavior and also others. Due to the limited boundaries of our mind, we and other people treat in a way that they judge. Although it does not sound good, but it is real and we should be careful about our cloth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, by the way, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33193277311 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30346772539 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47268907563 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.816593249 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.3076923077 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3076923077 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36531034402 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105404293276 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108752953733 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241204392317 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130950612002 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.75 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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