Essay topics: TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays many parents struggle to allocate time for their progeny as a result there is a hot discussion about how to use this precious time better. The first idea is to spend time on playing games and engaging in sport activities with children. The second viewpoint is to devote the parents' time to activities which are associated with schoolwork. Although I understand the ideas behind the first point of view, I support the second one. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, it will motivate children to study harder. Children seek parents’ attention and love; this is a basic and natural need of any child. If a parent openly demonstrates interest to youngster’s studying, the child will study harder in order to get prized by a beloved father or a mother especially when parents cannot spend much time with the offspring. Of course, a child may attract grown-ups attention via misbehavior but in case parents explicitly showcase their interest in child's school success and good marks, the youngster will do whatever the parents buttress.
Secondly, helping children with their schoolwork may allow parents to save a considerable amount of money. Many students have trouble with their studying at some point of their lives. As a result, decent and responsible adults have to address the problem. Usually it means hiring a tutor or a teacher who will work with child's school problems. This is quite expensive practice and in some cases parents may spend thousands of dollars on educators. However, if a parent decides to help the child with studying, those expenditures on tutors may be avoided easily in particular at elementary school level.
Finally, doing things which are related to schoolwork is beneficial for parents as well and may have a positive impact on their mood as well. It is common wisdom that the majority of our good memories are connected with our childhood. A father who explains his son how to multiply and divide numbers may return to his school years when he was happy and innocent. Helping with child's homework will let the parents to forget for a while about their problems which are associated with their work, family life and aging. As a result, a parent will benefit from this activity as well.
To wrap up, participation to activities which are related to schoolwork has positive influence on children's motivation to study, allows parents to avoid unnecessary expenses and gives the parents an indispensable opportunity to return to their happy childhood.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
We can't just support/against one side, we need to compare two sides too,
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2079 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.927 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.623 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.095 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.041 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.501 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, while, in particular, of course, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07109004739 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73543483108 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530805687204 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0258189725 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.904761905 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212643521924 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686534691454 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518641731126 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122287005538 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412843345073 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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