If you were the leader of the country, what kind of policy would you use to succeed?
Creating job for unemployed people
Develop agriculture and reduce food prices
Develop Housing
No one cast a shadow of a doubt on this fact that societies can flourish by creative and determined leaders who are serious to navigate their societies toward prosperous. Although many people believe that governors should focus on substructure needs such as building more houses, others think that the best way for developing societies is relying on agriculture development and decreasing food costs for citizens. I, however, believe that governments should concentrate on increasing job opportunities for recruiting people who do not have job. I feel this way for two cogent reasons, which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by simplifying job opportunities for unemployed individuals, rate of the drug addiction considerably will decrease. To more specific, in my country, research studies have shown that many of people who were addicted drugs and narcotic substances were jobless. Furthermore, when people could not be able to find suitable occupation, or finding job which supports their expenditures and their primary needs, they disappoint, and be will inclined to consume drugs and alcohol. Besides, they get involved other illegal activities, which will have worse effects on society such as robbery and selling drugs to other individuals. Then, if governments and rulers endeavor to afford favorable job for citizens, they will be able to lessen the rate of addiction in their societies. For instance, in my country, many institutions such as welfare institution and well-being institution have reported that more than 30 percent of young people (between 22 to 35 years) who have been addicted drugs and alcohol do not have been job. Therefore, these news apparently show that governments should intervene in this scope, and facilitate job conditions for unemployed people.
Secondly, by creating a job for young unemployed people, family status will be consolidated. To clarify, family is essential institution in every country, and we cannot imagine society without family. However, nowadays, many of young people could not be able to marry because they do not have a job, or it is better I say that since they do not have any income to support their needs, and they have to never think about this issue. Moreover, many families get divorced just because of pressures of tight income problems. Indeed, if job positions do not provide for citizens, undoubtedly many severe problems will be created, which not only young and unemployed people, but also whole aspects of society will be overwhelmed. Therefore, facilitating work conditions for unemployed people can reduced many problems in society, which reducing rate of divorce, and increasing reinforcement relationship between couples. As a result, rulers and representative of people can provide job conditions for people and prevent these specific dilemma in their societies.
To sum up, I strongly believe that providing job positions for unemployed individuals is one of the vital government roles. This is because they can decrease some social problems such as addiction to alcohol and consuming harmful materials, and because they can fortify position of family in society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2693.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4185110664 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9283459171 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494969818913 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 833.4 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0098687772 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.65 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.85 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.05 5.45110844103 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140037005965 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542965063405 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380248344672 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908836717554 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235948632788 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 86.8835125448 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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