Independence from parents
Questions surrounding whether young people should gain independence from their parents as early as is feasible have been ongoing in recent years, especially after the development of technology, which has generated a great difference between the younger generation and the older one. While some people believe that parents should take care of their children for a long time before they become independent, others believe that young people's independence has to be obtained as soon as possible. In my opinion, becoming independent soon is better: I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, taking responsibility for their own life makes young people mature and self-confident. If parents are always available to solve their issues, they will never learn how to behave in our society and how to face life problems autonomously. Besides, being independent does not mean only starting your own life, but it also means becoming independent of your parents-from an economical point of view. In my opinion, people have to begin working as soon as possible so that they can understand how saving money is important and valuable. For instance, my father got a job when he was in his twenties since my grandparents did not have enough money: he diligently earned money and never asked his parents for money. If he had not gotten a job when he was young, he would have been a burden for his family and he would also have never developed some skills, such as hard work and patience. Thus, independence from (and of) parents is extremely important for young people's individual development.
Second, being independent is more efficient since staying with you family for a long time can be counterproductive. In fact, even though your parents give you everything you need and therefore you live safely without caring about working, your parents can negatively influence you. In particular, they can decide for your life since they think to help you, but they are actually harming your personality. Another issue that can arise if young people live with their parents is when the younger and the older generations discuss about the technology. For instance, my parents are anti-technological and conservative and so they do not like that I use some technological devices. I only visit them in summer, but I believe that if I had to live with them for a longer time, we would have troublesome discussions, and this could be harmful.
All in all, this essay discussed why young people have to become independent as soon as possible. This is because they can become more mature and because they can avoid having problems with their family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... independent, others believe that young peoples independence has to be obtained as soon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in fact, in particular, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02934537246 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84870480358 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503386004515 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4998612843 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.777777778 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6111111111 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252137830016 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948379601245 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111903835699 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159238047511 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792747962317 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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