It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Concentration is a key to success. In todays' complicated lives, people tend to focus as far as they can on issues which are of their business more and more. In this regard, some think that an individual should spare time gathering information about what is going on in other parts of the world, however, I, personally, believe that it is of great importance to be aware of the happenings all around the world because our world's problems depend on each other, and if you are not aware of important news of other parts of the world, you will not be informed also about your daily life matters.
One of the primary causes is that nowadays all problems are interconnected. One cannot truly separate some field from the other fields. Mundane issues are not exceptions. They are in connection with other fields indeed. For example, some may claim that US presidential election is none of a foreigner's business, but I disagree. As long as the president of United States has the authority to set policies such as sanctions, trade tariffs and migration regulations which directly affect daily lives of people who live outside of America, pursuing news from the US presidential election by a nonnative like me enjoys a good logical basis. Consider that in China's case, putting sanctions on Huawei prompted interruptions in mobile phone services of people who did not necessarily live in United States.
Another worthwhile aspect to consider is that usually news agencies provide information about different areas in one place. It is definitely difficult to find a specific so-called news package that exclusively covers news related to your concerns. If one wanted to stick to news which are about daily life issues e.g. cooking, work, and entertainment, then, inevitably, he should see news about other issues because they are presented in a mixture. For instance, when you love some cooking show in CNN, probably, you would become, more or less familiar with current political happenings of the world too.
In conclusion, I believe that every body requires to be informed of what are going around the world since problems relate to one another and news sources present a mixture of various issues together. Thus, it would be logical to spend some time becoming aware of the world news.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., however, if, may, so, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97120418848 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69002591294 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557591623037 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 102.982534168 48.9658058833 210% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 118.6875 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204267557253 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471669867383 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651571967858 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123222363369 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833216784737 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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