It is more important for the government to spend money on new building than to preserve historic or traditional buildings and homes
Budgeting is a great challenge for governments since it causes lots of conflicts among different groups of citizens. Some people are of the opinion that we should preserve the historical buildings while others hold an opposite point of view. Even though we can learn lots of things from historical buildings, but I insist that investing in new buildings has a greater priority. In the following, I am willing to support my perspective by proposing two main arguments.
First and the foremost reason lies in the fact that government should satisfy the growing demands of the society. Population growth causes lots of problems for the government. They have to build some efficient buildings which occupy less space and have all of the facility for its inhabitants. The government should spend money on the research projects. Civil engineering is a wide branch of knowledge that covers scores of subjects. The government should provide appropriate funds for these projects. I admit that we can learn from our ancestors. However, I think past information is trivial compared to the future findings. In that case, we should look for new methods to answer upcoming needs. For instance, there was a great debate in my city about an old building in the city center. It had about one hundred years old. But it was located in the city center. It contributed to traffic jams. After its destruction, people could reach their workplaces on time. In fact, the municipal government ended up this problem. Accordingly, I think our current needs have a higher priority than our useless inheritances.
Another subtle factor rests on the notion that government can reduce the pressure on traditional buildings by making new buildings. Nowadays, some historical building is used for practical purposes. By making new building we can increase their life spans. For instance, there is a famous museum in my city, Birjand. Its building is related to two century ago. It has two stories. There is a growing concern about the second story since scientists believe crowds of people can destroy it over time. In that case, local government is going to change the museum location. A new building can lower the negative effect of people in that building. There is numerous similar example in my country which those historical buildings are used. Therefore, the government should invest in new building with higher efficiency to facilitate people's lives and keep old buildings intact.
To sum up, I would like to point out that we should prepare ourselves for future. In other words, our current needs have greater priority than the previous ones. Not only will it solve scores of existing problems but it also decreases the destruction possibility of historical buildings and monuments due to overuse. We all should consider various aspects of our decisions on our lives. Some ideas at first might seem plausible, but, in fact, they just waste our efforts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ldings which occupy less space and have all of the facility for its inhabitants. The gover...
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Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'century' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'centuries'.
Suggestion: centuries
...Birjand. Its building is related to two century ago. It has two stories. There is a gro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in fact, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2455.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09336099585 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69806318418 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533195020747 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.6003584229 175% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.3611349547 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.1944444444 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3888888889 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80555555556 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347076499694 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0745633927669 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718405966057 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205105040153 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888966778152 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.65 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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