It is more important to keep old friends rather than to make new friends
A great deal of attention has been attracted to people's relations focusing on the fact that whether it is valuable to maintain our previous friends or make new friends. I, for one, describe to the notion that having new relationships are more beneficial than lasting our previous relations. To substantiate this view point, two reasons are elaborated in what fallows.
To being with, a typical person can be successful if he makes new friends in new situations. In fact, our reliance to our old friends and relations poses formidable obstacle to achieving our goals. Therefore, it is crystal clear that as we gain new experience, we should update the people we are in contact with. My life can illustrate this point clearly. Being at the age of 25, I have a specific group of friend mainly consisted of my classmates from my undergraduate study. However, I started to work in an international company and developed new relations with people who behave in a mature and expert way. Comparing my childish behavior with my old friends, I recognized that it would not be possible for me to gradually progress in my career if I continued my relation with that group. Therefore, I started to be in contact with my colleagues, those whom I desired to be like them and conversely limit my relation with my classmates those whom I decided to not be like them which was eventually resulted in a major breakthrough in my profession after some years. Had I not disconnected my relation with former friends and not made new relations with my colleagues, I would not thrive in my job and personal life.
Secondly, by making new friends an individual will learn new skills and strengthen his characteristic features. In other words, the more friends we have, the greater likelihood of leaning new thing from them will be. Consequently, by receiving new knowledge we can modify our way of life and enlarge our vision in order to be in a better positions. For instance, my younger brother, Jack, was in close relation with a number of neighbors’ children. Sharing similar habits and hobbies, they were just playing video games and were not aware of the entire world. However, one day my brother accidentally met a girl in a social media, and had really good relationship with that girl. After being in contact with her for a while, he could change his character from a shy boy to a totally sociable person since he regularly went to different parties with his girlfriend and made numerous friends in different places. In this regard, my brother received new experience and knowledge in his relations by making new friends and subsequently he strengthened new abilities.
In conclusion, above from aforementioned explanations, I do believe that trying to make new friends is more acceptable than being in our previous condition with our previous friends. This is because not only we can increase our capabilities such as social ability by new friends but also we become more prosperous in new situations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...deal of attention has been attracted to peoples relations focusing on the fact that whe...
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Line 5, column 4, Rule ID: BEING_BEGIN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'begin'?
Suggestion: begin
...are elaborated in what fallows. To being with, a typical person can be successfu...
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Line 5, column 1016, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
...them which was eventually resulted in a major breakthrough in my profession after some years. Had ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92899408284 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94132244966 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514792899408 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5788044555 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.590909091 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0454545455 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244801432997 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929632501584 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086754557463 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196132237716 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536241113104 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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