leadership..it is a born-gift; people cannot learn to be a leader
When people see politicians, CEO or any people who have leadership, many people assume that they were born as leaders. I thought just like the majority of people, and I didn’t try to become a leader in any situation because it was not something for me. However, after spending many years in my university, I found that by practicing and with confidence people can become leaders just as people who seem like to have natural talent to become leaders.
I think practicing is important regarding growing leadership. Being a leader also takes practice just as practice to become a nice singer. When I was sophomore, I became a team leader of dance club of my university. I hated that position because I thought that I will never become a leader because I don’t have charisma. However, I couldn’t abandon the spot because people were expecting me to be the team leader. It took a while to manage my group well, but as time went by, I was surprised that people like me, who are shy most of the time, can have a leadership, which has a different form than outgoing people and it was by giving my teammates more caring. Through my experience, I learned that even if I cannot have a leadership as politicians who are amazing at making speech in front of thousands of people, I can shape my own leadership that fits my personality.
Secondly, there is a saying that ‘fake it, till make it’. One researcher of Harvard had a research about why female students in her MBA class were less charismatic with less leadership. And she had counseling with those students who had hard time having leadership, which is important for MBA students. Surprisingly, she found that believing that you can do something changes people’s behavior. The professor found that after her students started faking charisma or anything that is related to leadership, they made it through the MBA program amazingly just as students who had leadership from the beginning. This episode teaches us that believing that you can be a leader gives you a leadership.
In conclusion, because of my personal experience, I think that leadership is something that we have to practice to find your own way to be a leader. In addition, based on the research, believing that you can be a leader give a an ability to become a leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...it'. One researcher of Harvard had a research about why female students in her MBA cl...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice finding'.
Suggestion: practice finding
...leadership is something that we have to practice to find your own way to be a leader. In additio...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...believing that you can be a leader give a an ability to become a leader.
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...believing that you can be a leader give a an ability to become a leader.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, while, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 27.0 11.0286738351 245% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79949874687 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86653471109 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491228070175 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2863218731 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1666666667 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3012497213 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965071774311 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520804575597 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188231132812 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302040170304 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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