Loyalty is the most important quality in choosing a friend
I do not believe loyalty is the most important quality when it comes to choosing a friend. when I think of the single most important attribute I want a friend to have, it would be honesty.
I need to be able to trust my friends and I need to believe that they’r">they’re going to be honest with me. that honesty includes telling me when i’m wrong. if I make a mistake, or if i’m making choices that my friends don’t agree with, I need to know that they’r">they’re going to be honest and bring it up to me. I want my friends to challenge me and make me better, and if they’r">they’re too worried about appearing “disloyal” to do that, then I don’t think the friendhsip is very healthy. if my friends aren’t blindly loyal to me than their support is all the more meaningful. it means they critically looked at my actions and have chosen to stand behind me rather than telling me i’m right just because we’re friends. it makes their support more valid.
I also believe that people need to fight their own battles. Say, for example, my best friend and I have a third friend in common who i’m not too fond of. if loyalty were the most important thing to me, I may try to sway my best friend to also start dislking the third friend or even stop associating with them. I don’t think that’s a fair thing to ask a friend to do, but I’ve certainly seen that type of control in different real life friendships. I think sometimes loyalty can lead to a sort situation where people can stop thinking for themselves and start acting as a unit and while I think it’s important to have a sense of community, you also want to keep your individuality. if everyone thought the same we would never learn from one another, and I think one of the greatest gifts of friendship is exposing each other to new things and ideas.
I don’t want my friends to be loyal to me just because that’s what they think friendship is. I want them to choose to be loyal when they are truly moved to do so and I want to be able to trust them enough to honestly express themselves and tell me when they think i’m wrong. I certainly would have enough respect for them and the friendship to do the same.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, if, look, may, so, then, third, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70515970516 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.53178527592 2.67179642975 132% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464373464373 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5419149921 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.388888889 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178901014328 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906561360136 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156438424592 0.0737576698707 212% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20327779562 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.20829097555 0.0645574589148 323% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.94 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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