Many companies provide important products or services, but also damage the environment. Some
people believe that the best way to stop companies from harming the environment is to require them to
pay a penalty such as higher tax or a large fine when they cause environmental damage. Other people
think there are better ways to stop the companies from harming the environment. Which view do you
agree with and why?
We are living in a sophisticated age which companies and our environment have a profound impact on our hectic life. People are always to make their lives more convenient, healthier and successful. Some people believe that in ordered to protect our living areas, companies which damage environment should stop, while others are convinced that these companies provide important goods and it is better that they pay a penalty such as higher tax. After carefully pondering it from several aspects, i strongly agree with the latter idea. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
First of all, obviously, these companies are producing the basic and important goods for people. As a matter of fact, if these companies stop, people encounter with a lot of problems. To illustrate this fact, on needs only refer to result of this decision which people buy their essential products with high cost because after stopping these product should import from other cities or even countries. Seldom does this decision bring people benefit. Although these companies damage the environment, what results from stopping them are to enhance the rate of unemployment among people because most of people miss their jobs. The noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that the high percentage of people missing their job due to closing companies, are ones having a lot of problem in their live.
The second reason why i agree with it is that, undoubtedly, the money gained by penalty such as increasing the amount of tax provides an opportunity for governments investing these great deal of money on renewable energy. The modern world offers abundant examples of governments which install solar panels or wind turbine are bale to decrease the consuming of fossil fuels. Hence, if I were to be a determiner in our country, i would have established a center to investigate the negative effect of each company and estimate tax based on their damage and consume these taxes on protecting environment. In addition to aforementioned notes, there is a well-known proverb in Persian, The equivalent of which in English may sound like this" the more government use the renewable energy, the more people would live longer"
To make a long story short, no one can deny the enormous positive effect of increasing tax for the companies that damage the environment. Not only do these companies could provide essential goods for people, but also by paying penalty, they are able to contribute in protection of environment. For this reason, i highly recommended that all companies help gov
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 336, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this product' or 'these products'?
Suggestion: this product; these products
...s with high cost because after stopping these product should import from other cities or even...
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Line 2, column 591, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...te of unemployment among people because most of people miss their jobs. The noteworthy intelli...
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...their job due to closing companies, are ones having a lot of problem in their live. ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of problems'.
Suggestion: a lot of problems
...e to closing companies, are ones having a lot of problem in their live. The second reason why ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... in their live. The second reason why i agree with it is that, undoubtedly, the...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...reat deal of money on renewable energy. The modern world offers abundant examples o...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, well, while, in addition, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2219.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16046511628 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77269483868 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551162790698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4751460698 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.529411765 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2941176471 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233566580286 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764767134098 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771844341759 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151753839079 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444673234721 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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