Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.
Environmental and food quality are two important issues that people keep focusing on, nowadays a new discussion over whether people should keep using wrong agricultural ways to provide food for people or they should stop to protect their environment. In my opinion, I believe guaranteeing the environment is in a balanced state is more vital, because without it, people’s food quality would be decreased more seriously.
Firstly, polluted soil could make crops toxic for people. Misusing pesticides is one of the most harmful agricultural pollution. Without learning relevant knowledge, farmers blindly use various of pesticides to kill worms, which could lead to the contamination to soils. According to the newest record from the Peking University, soils beneath most of farmlands contain five times chemical heavy metal elements that cannot be digested by humans more than they should. From the report we can conclude that if we let go agricultural contamination, there would be no safeguards for people’s meals, and those toxic elements could make people be sick and even threats to their lives. There are many examples in arid places where arable soils are much less than other places. With the irrigation of pesticides, those soils always contain even more toxic elements, leading to more dangerous crops. So, people living on there tend to lose their hairs and may be dizzy if they eat too much rice. So unscientific irrigation methods can make people get sick.
Meanwhile, contaminated soil can reduce the fertility of lands, leading to insufficient food supply. Another serious pollution is due to over-planting. People’s population has been increasing for many years, and to satisfy the demands of food for more people, farmers do not obey natural conventions, instead, they increase their frequency of harvest and choose farmlands randomly as long as seeds can survive. Such behaviors exhaust nutrition in the soil, so crops cannot live on there anymore, farms’ production is declining. For example, in many developing countries, people used to regard food as the most vital resource, so they blindly planted crops all over their country. Several years ago people finally realized that their farmlands could not feed them anymore because their lands were damaged by their unreasonable planting method, they could only import food and their developments were paused. That is we cannot only focus on production at the present.
In conclusion, preventing the environment from agricultural pollution is more important because it ensures the both the safety of people’s food and the production of farmer’s crops in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the farmlands') or simply say ''most farmlands''.
Suggestion: most of the farmlands; most farmlands
...om the Peking University, soils beneath most of farmlands contain five times chemical heavy metal...
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Line 5, column 913, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[10]
Message: The pronoun is must be used with 'are'.
Suggestion: are
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37410071942 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78555932065 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573141486811 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.635449408 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.947368421 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9473684211 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201490257061 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055755938625 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531767339368 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145640840808 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497406924797 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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