Most people can solve important problems in their lives by themselves or with the help of their families, help from the government is often unnecessary Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In a society that changes as amazingly as ours, the role played by government in our daily life has been brought by the spotlight of mass media. Consequently, the general public and sociologists are wondering whether people can solve important problems individually or with the governmental support? Towards such a long running tug-of war, I inclined to claim that the help from government is necessary in the process of solving important problems, especially in the aspects of protecting environment and addressing the disparity of educational resources.
In the first instance, consider the environment issues. As is common sense, the deteriorating natural environment is so severe and complicated that the solution of such a problem is far beyond the reach of any individuals or families. The serious air pollution in China is a good case in point. Despite the fact that people can take some actions such as wearing masks or taking public transportations to relive haze occurring frequently in some major cities of China in some degree, the problem cannot be radically solved. To illustrate, the major cause for the amoggy whether is nothing but the emissions of waste gas such as dust and smog from an appalling number of heavey-pollution factories. In this case, it is government that can get rid of the fundamental cause by shutting down these plants and enacting laws or regulations to restrict their production, which cannot be achieved by any individuals.
In the second instance, the same logic goes to educational problems. As is known to all, many school-age children in rural and remote areas are not able to receive education in school due to the lack of educational resources. According to a survey conducted by the Education Ministry of China in 2015, approximately 3 million kids didn’t have the chance to get educated in the southwest of China, on account of lacking in tables, textbooks, and even spacious classrooms. When confronted with the issue mentioned above, what individuals or families can do is quite limited. Undoubtedly, only government has the adequate financial resources and prower to allocate educational resources to those places. For example, the Chinese government builds nearly 10,000 primary schools called Hope School in the distant areas, which alleviates the disparity in eductional resources between different regions to a large extent.
Judging from what has been discussed above, we can draw the conclusion that although the ability of individuals or families is becoming greater and stronger than before, the help from government is of great necessity in the cause of solving important problems, especially in the areas of education and environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 164, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...tlight of mass media. Consequently, the general public and sociologists are wondering whether ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2282.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30697674419 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02804986624 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562790697674 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.4982758416 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.625 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188921384125 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525985165766 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634632776617 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125546088054 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682438527158 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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