optimistic or not optimistic
Throughout history, mankind has been perpetually concerned with the routes to success. Since competition has been enhanced dramatically in the modern era, this concern has been made heated debates among different kind of people. Some specialists might argue that achieving success in more important than remaining happy and optimistic I, on the contrary hold a different view. In the following paragraphs, I will illuminate my standpoint with a vivid image and elaborate my reasons regarding this issue.
First and foremost, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of mental health on every aspect of life. To put it differently, the more people suffer from mental illnesses, the more their efficiency in work time reduce. Take a personal experience as an example. A few years back, I started to work as an English teacher in an elementary school. The pressure on my shoulders was uprising daily, because parents always wanted more progress from their children and they blame me for that matter. In the climax of predicaments, I went to see a psychologist and he told me to spend more time relaxing in my apartment. The results were extraordinary. After 1 month, I was back on track and parents started to like me even more than before.
Furthermore, one should not underestimate the fact that if you lose control when you are in the trenches, you may face irreversible losses. Failures won’t end. In the introduction of a book that I recently read, there was a saying from Falkner. “no one should neglect the significant impact of sorrow in the way to triumph.” This saying meticulously depicts anyone should embrace sorrow and exert it well to reach to his desires. I want to juxtapose sorrow with happiness. Both of them are emotional reactions to one’s surrounding. In this regard, I think people should persistently retain their happiness and optimistic viewpoint.
To encapsulate, I cling to the idea that says remaining happy and optimistic in the times of difficulties is more important than achieving success. However, that was a story in a nutshell. Protecting one’s happiness is a remarkable act which needs experience and concentration. All in all, isn’t it true that whenever we lose, we don’t have the courage to start over for a long period of time? Maybe we can only minimize the length of this period.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ve the courage to start over for a long period of time? Maybe we can only minimize the length ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, i think, kind of, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07416879795 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00649802211 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593350383632 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.8253913908 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6666666667 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2916666667 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0881345868702 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0247417116829 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657087542301 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0574185745971 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339216356537 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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