A glance at people’s attitude toward tourism, brings to the light a question that has been asked several times, namely, whether safety is more important or the city appearance. Although some people believe that cities’ appearance and looking is what they want to travel a country, I completely think opposite. As a person who has visited five countries recently, my opinion is that safety must be the priority because of several reasons.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea lies in the fact that security is one of the first and basic needs that humankinds want. If a person feels that the rate of rape, theft and burglary is high, he will not consider that country for travel. There is some evidence that proves my idea. For example, during the Iraq’s war the tourist population decreases to one third even if it was easier to get visa. After finishing the war, tourist population gradually increased even though the appearance of the Iraq’s cities still was bad. A study at Harvard University shows that individuals prefer to have journey to the safe and sound countries. Therefore, safety is the essential part of tourism market.
Another reason that I should deem is the fact that without safety, troublemakers destroy the historical places despite of government attempts. For instance, even if the government build a new shopping mall, they break the glasses and ruin the public area. Without enough police, nobody can control this situation and it is waste of money. This happened in Egypt when people were not satisfied of political activities of government and destroyed some part of the countries to show their dissatisfaction. The amounts of tourists dropped significantly during strikes and the city appearance got very damaged. Hence, hiring more police can protect historical places.
Admittedly, people would like to see beautiful attractions such as museums, palaces and aquariums. A safe town without any fabulous location is dreadful for people to visit. Nevertheless, when we compare two cities one safe and not beautiful, and the other beautiful and not safe, people are more willing to visit the first one.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I strongly recommend the government to spend budget on safety and hire more police rather than repairing old buildings and streets to improve its appearance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 619, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'journeyed'.
Suggestion: journeyed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, third, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19896640827 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8089008199 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604651162791 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7646832503 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.6 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17749572765 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045791385016 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737037180619 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114350090514 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102583673327 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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