In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Good child mad good adult. Most of the time our childhood activities reflect when we become adults. I agree with the statement that if children learn how manage their own money at their youn age, then obviously when they become adult they are financially responsible. I feel this way for two main resons, which I will explore in the following eassy.
First of all, the children who learn to save money when were young, they continue that habbit when they were adults. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was grade six one of the leading banks in my country came to our school and they gave a lecture about benifits of saving money. From that day I used save mony which my parents gave me for my lunch. As a habbit even now I use to save a potion of my monthly salary.
Secondly, If peerents can teach their chaildren to spend their mony only for use full thinks that will be good practice when they become adults. Fro instant, When we were samll our perents use to say "befor spending mony you must think twice that do you really need spend mony that specificthing. If not you will wast mony for unnesseary thinks". My brother used to listen my perants always. There for when he was young he didn't spend money for buy unwonted things. Still he has that qulity. Because of saving mony recently he bought a new fantastic house and a brand new car.
In contrast I strongly belive that childern shoud learn to manage their own mony at young age, inoder to become financially respondible adult. This is because of the experience I had in my life and experience I had form my brother.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, i feel, in contrast, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54948805461 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39111565998 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549488054608 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2720364185 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0555555556 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2777777778 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23560834009 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0717192575038 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119811605496 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176196921933 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0974464564737 0.0645574589148 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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