People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Some people are inclined towards the attribute that in recent times people spend more time on their personal entertainment. Whereas, others hold the opposite perspective. No one can deny the fact that there are both positive and negative aspects of how you utilize your time. As it said that "Time never comes back". I personally, though, believe that, in today's era people are wasting their time more on their own amusement rather than doing something worthy. In the following essay, I intended to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that when we spend a lot of time on our own pleasure and enjoyment, it will be detrimental to the future in the long run. Moreover, from the education point of view, we may lose our track. Also, we may not be able to manage our academics and life balance. As it is said that “ Everything is dust, Education is must”. Consequently, by not managing our time wisely we may end up in a very worse situation. This can be best explained by this vivid example, one student spends most of the time on self entertainment instead of giving his precious time to his professional studies. As a result, he faced the consequences in terms of failure. Therefore, by this instance it is clear as a sky that if he manages his time and utilizes it in useful things, it will be fruitful and he will not have to undergo this trauma.
From a social standpoint, communicating with people will help them to improve communication skills. The invention of social media such as facebook, instagram, have bring people near and allows people to hear from diverse backgrounds, which interns allows them to get different points of view. On the other hand, if these advancements are not tackled properly, today’s generation will spoil their golden time in surfing their sites and in return will have no social life practically. In addition to this, they will not have any friend’s circle. Which I turn, results in stress and anxiety. Thus, by this it is evident that if we will not spend our time on genuine things, it will have an ill effect on our society as a whole.
In conclusion, by all the reasons and points above, I advise people to utilize their time for good because instead of regretting things in future, it's better to correct ourselves today. If they do this, they will discover for themselves that it's so overwhelming and helpful that utilizing time on useful work has countless educational and social benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e time on their personal entertainment. Whereas, others hold the opposite perspective. ...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...media such as facebook, instagram, have bring people near and allows people to hear f...
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Line 8, column 137, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...od because instead of regretting things in future, its better to correct ourselves today....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79953917051 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69602681701 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543778801843 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1286750295 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6818181818 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7272727273 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182871636129 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456306368978 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624188514363 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126629599729 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074995873234 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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