A person should never make an important decision alone.
Within a person's lengthy lifetime, there are a number of momentous decisions that need to be made in some significant movements. When it comes to whether individuals should make their own resolutions, opinion varies among people with different backgrounds. Some people prefer to make an essential determination entirely by their own thoughts, while others hold the view that adults should never make a predominant decision alone. In my opinion, I agree with the later point. To substantiate my point of view, two reasons are being explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the decisions individuals make on their own are often less comprehensive so that they would have a negative impact on their lives. To be more specific, the professional knowledge and broad foresight of an independent entity is limited compared to that the sum of a few fellows who have even though he has already had a couple of life experiences before. With lacking those materials mentioned above, people may not judge one thing from all its aspects when they are making a fateful determination. In this case, they would probably make an unsatisfied decision related to their academic or occupation careers which would accompany them through their entire lifetime and even lose interest in what they are pursuing eventually. For example, it is acknowledged that students need to choose a major that they would have a deep research within four years and find a related professional job in the future before they go to college. If the kid decides his own specialty without help form teachers or parents, their decision about their future domain may base on their own interests and life experiences and short of advanced knowledge of the world as well as prediction of future social development. Therefore, it is a hard time for them to find a satisfied job after graduation in this fiercely competitive market. Hence, lake of some professional insights makes it difficult for people to make all-sided decisions.
What is more, when people make an important determination only by themselves, the result of their decision is frequently not objective enough and therefore it would causes some conflicts among fellows. Adults are used to make conclusions according to their own ideas and considerations which merely comes from their own perspectives. From what they have been considered above, we can conclude an idea that this decision they made is not objective enough because they hardly put others' opinions into consideration which would be equally significant for entire development. Hence, this decision may affect the benefits of others and even destroy relationships among good partners. For instance, the employee should not make a leading determination only from their personal standpoint which would bring serious hazards to the enterprise's profits. As a result of, individuals must consider issues more objectively instead of just from themselves.
To sum up, from what has been discussed above, we can draw a conclusion that making a major decision from people own is not only less comprehensive but also too subjective, which would bring numerous unsatisfied consequences in the end.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 8, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
Within a persons lengthy lifetime, there are a number of...
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Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... have a negative impact on their lives. To be more specific, the professional know...
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Line 2, column 832, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'deep research'.
Suggestion: deep research
... to choose a major that they would have a deep research within four years and find a related pr...
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Line 3, column 166, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'cause'
Suggestion: cause
...objective enough and therefore it would causes some conflicts among fellows. Adults ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2672.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23921568627 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92441235467 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521568627451 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.5453670242 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228235513647 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721677353099 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.070387558464 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149210137572 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065897533789 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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