physical exercise is important to older people than to young people
Conventional wisdom generally believes that older people need to do much physical exercise since they typically have a relatively bad health condition and doing exercises will be beneficial for the older people from many aspects. For example, older people who often play basketball or swim will have a good physical and mental condition. Young people, on the other hand, are not often suggested to focus more on physical exercise because young people have to spend time on their study, work and taking care of their parents. However, based on my own experiences on this issue, I prefer to endorse that physical exercise may be more important to young people, rather than older people. I will state my point of view from two aspects as followings.
First of, it is essential for young people to spend more time on physical exercise because they will be more energetic after the exercises. As we all know, physical exercise will improve people’s body condition notably. In today’s society, young people face much stress, they need to work hard to gain a descent salary to care their babies and parents, therefore, physical exercise will be important to young people. In this regard, I often provide my father’s experience to illustrate my perspective. My father has to take care four people so he need to work hard to gain a more descent salary and he almost never did any physical exercise. After several days had work, my dad felt tired out and he had a serious fever. After the doctor cured him, my father decided to change his health condition totally and from then on, he does exercise every day. And today I can see how strong he is !
Furthermore, as we all know, doing exercise will improve young people’s mental state. Young people are facing so much pressure that they often feel they are disappointed to their life. And some young people, to some extent, start to emerge the mind to kill themselves, because do not know how to reduce their pressure. In this case, I believe if they spend some time to do physical exercise, their terrible condition will have a huge improve. When I was 18 years old, I need to prepare my graduation exam, which will have a huge impact towards my future life. Everyday, I felt bored and tired, I do not want to do anything. My dad saw my terrible situation and requested me to do regular physical exercise. After several days’ exercise, I felt so energetic and went back to my study. Finally, I got a good grade and entered a satisfactory university.
In a nutshell, from what has been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that physical exercise is important to young people than older people since regular physical exercise will provide young people the opportunities to improve their condition, mentally and physically.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: CONFUSION_OF_DECENT_DESCENT[2]
Message: Did you mean 'decent'?
Suggestion: decent
... so he need to work hard to gain a more descent salary and he almost never did any phys...
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[2]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
...e a huge impact towards my future life. Everyday, I felt bored and tired, I do not want ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, as to, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63931847183 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.78154335 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6818181818 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77272727273 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.433304550182 0.236089414692 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134878083654 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147225776424 0.0737576698707 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.361325852492 0.150856017488 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.174158429139 0.0645574589148 270% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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