Playing computer games is waste of time . Children should not be allowed to play them
Over the last few decades, video games have developed with rapid speed. A lot of parents claimed that their children waste so much time on playing video games. In opposite side, some people thought that playing video games is also a job so people should respect that. In my opinion , I am better convinced by the former for the follow reasons.
First ideas come out of my mind is the time waste on playing games. Researcher point out that children are spend average four hours per day on playing video games. They can do something more helpful or meaningful such as playing sport, doing homework, watching science videos or helping people. In addition, time is undoubtedly valuable. Take my friend Ho Duc Hieu as an example, he was very smart when we joined a math class together.He started playing video games and waste too much time on that. After few weeks, he has been in the bottom of class rank . And finally, he has been the only one that fail the exam. He very sad and he wish he had not wasted too much time on playing video games.
Secondly, playing video games too much is not good for your health. When you sit in front of screen for a long time, blue light from screen can damage your eyes and cause nearsighted. Moreover, sitting four , five hours per day is not good. It will decrease your longevity and cause some disease like obesity. By the large , playing video games too much can cause a lot of diseases.
In conclusion, playing videos game can waste a lot of time and not good for your health. It is highly recommended that people should carefully consider my writting before playing video games.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eople should respect that. In my opinion , I am better convinced by the former for...
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...I am better convinced by the former for the follow reasons. First ideas come out of my ...
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...day on playing video games. They can do something more helpful or meaningful suc...
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...lass rank . And finally, he has been the only one that fail the exam. He very sad...
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... that fail the exam. He very sad and he wish he had not wasted too much time on play...
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...d too much time on playing video games. Secondly, playing video games too much i...
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...use nearsighted. Moreover, sitting four , five hours per day is not good. It will...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 52.1666666667 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 290.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59655172414 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22500202137 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555172413793 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.1890137929 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 70.1578947368 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307319925237 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106279418769 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866311327538 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217565440847 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567657641146 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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