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is risk taking and trying new things important part of being successful?

When addressing success and successful people, each individual has their own specific criteria and we can surely say neither of them are wrong. All that said, I strongly agree with the statement that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. In my opinion, one's ability to take chances contributes a great deal to their success. I will demonstrate my reasons as follows;

Firstly, trying new things expands a person's thinking horizons and develops their perception of the world around them into a more complex one. therefore, such people can acquire greater adaptation skills to difficult situations, more creative problem solving abilities and of course, the courage to apply them. imagine what would happen if bill gates or steve jobs had been afraid to take a risk and hadn't had the vision that led to their success today.

Secondly, doing what you know very little about rather than what you know how to do well, broadens the spectrum of the individual's knowledge and skills in different areas. For example, if I want to order a red chair from a carpenter, I much rather go to someone who knows about painting the chair, different kinds of chair present in the market, and possibly interior design to give me some useful ideas.

Finally, in my opinion, the ability to exprience and experiment various paths in life and setting no limits for a person's capabilities in their own mind, gives people the confidence to create oppurtunities and move towards success.

In conclusion, I believe that risk taking and trying new things plays an important role in an individual's road to success.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hey know how to do well. In my opinion, ones ability to take chances contributes a g...
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Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...; Firstly, trying new things expands a persons thinking horizons and develops their pe...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...ld around them into a more complex one. therefore, such people can acquire greater adapta...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Imagine
...d of course, the courage to apply them. imagine what would happen if bill gates or stev...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...jobs had been afraid to take a risk and hadnt had the vision that led to their succes...
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Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...o do well, broadens the spectrum of the individuals knowledge and skills in different areas...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t to order a red chair from a carpenter, I much rather go to someone who knows ab...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, you know, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 15.1003584229 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 279.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95340501792 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56666363851 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623655913978 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.1959488841 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.2 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.45110844103 248% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269129559766 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114314995408 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124808400024 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171108205624 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149555385566 0.0645574589148 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, you know, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments