Some adults believe that nowadays children's behavior is worse than children's behavior in the past. These adults have suggested 3 actions that parents can do to help their children aged 6 -10 behave better, (for example, speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward other children.) Which 1 action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children's behavior? Why? 1. Limiting the types of TV programs and movies their children can watch. 2. spending more time talking with their children. 3. Supervising or monitoring more closely what their children do when they play with their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, more and more children have impolite behaviors when they are young and parents do not teach them meticulously about the problems. In my opinion, spending more time talking with their children might have the most positive effect on their children's behavior.
First of all, spending more time talking with their children is the most efficient method. Now that parents could readily understand their children's thoughts by directly listening to their children's words, they can instantly give their advices to their children and correct their children's unrespectful behaviors efficiently. For example, my brother john is a 9 year-old kid, who usually likes to play jokes on others and he is always aggresive. Last week when he was playing with his friends, he got mad at a younger boy because the uneven distribution of candies and he beated the younger boy. After this happened, my aunt immediately mitigated the severe situation and told my brother that fighting is a bad behavior which is impolite to others even younger kids. By listening to my aunt representation, john apologized to that younger boy, completely realize the unethnic of his behavior and even never does this in the future. Therefore, taking to children could engender them downright understand the problem and improve their behavior.
Moreover, spending more time talking with their children is easier to operate than the other two strategies. In that parents do not have eadequate time to supervise their children at anywhere in anytime, which is a considerable burden for them and children often feel restricted without freedom when they are playing, supervision is not a helpful tactic. Plus, children could also learn some bad bahavior on the Internet or from advertisements insteand of TV programs,so other two ways may not be beneficial to help children become more respectful. For instance, my roommate jerry are unwilling to attend their official family meeting every time. Once her mother cancel family meetings and casually discuss a few of emotions and topics about her, jerry feel more comfortable and is likely to share her feelings with her family. Hence, spending more time talking with children would be easy to execute.
In sum, talking to children would be both efficient and easy for parents to operate.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, may, moreover, so, therefore, for example, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21563342318 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68940839541 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530997304582 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1609518824 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.9375 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1875 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313705516362 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119188926075 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850004105392 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215602987149 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0629101222238 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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