Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use reasons and examples to support your answer?
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether celebrities deserve the high salary that they receive every year or not. While some people think these famous people earn that money by their hard effort, I hold the opposite view. Personally, I believe that most celebrities do not deserve that huge amount of salary.
To begin with, entertainers do not value the huge amount of money that they received because most of them do not put an effort to earn it. They tend to practice or do some training only for few hours a day. For example, the UFC champion Khalid said one time on the TV that he only practices two hours a day. Furthermore, he has only three games every year. However, he receives more than five million dollars each year. Therefore, anyone who has this tremendous amount of money might use it in a wrong way because he\she did not struggle enough to earn that money. There is a phrase says, “easy come, easy go”; so this popular boxing player used most of his money in gambling and drugs.
On the other hand, if some professors have this huge salary, they would directly put that money to help their research because they value the money that they make. For instance, there is a professor at Boston University called Mark Bradley. He won the Nobel Prize in discovering some medications that cure cancer. He used to earn one million dollars as a salary; moreover, he valued the money that he makes because he puts most of his effort on research. Thus, he spends most of his wealth to build some cancer research institutions in Boston.
In conclusion, I definitely think that most well-known people do not deserve high salaries. Instead, there are some experts and professors who have an important role in the community deserve such salary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a wrong way" with adverb for "wrong"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tremendous amount of money might use it in a wrong way because he\she did not struggle enough ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73633440514 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42439038907 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556270096463 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6462639013 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.6470588235 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2941176471 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47058823529 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225826076769 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077906371675 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608404726401 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166561620183 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788037264257 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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