Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Depends on the requirement one should use or allowed to use an instrument, it is specially important, when it is concerned with a young children. The smart phone is a very essential equipment in the present days for an adult person. However, if the same smart phone is allowed to a young one, that may cause different problems and that results unwanted consequences. I personally, disagree to allow the smart phone to a young child.
First and foremost, in generally the young children have a keen attraction toward the electronic goods like mobile, calculators and remote controles. Mostly, when it offers different entertainment like game, movie, internet and many more, the children stay busy with it. In the classroom, the young children will not give attention to study and teacher's lecture, if they are allowed to use mobile phone. That causes less learning and that also distructs other students from study. Therefore, the parents should not allow smart phone to that young children.
Secondly, the increasing number of smart phone usage are catalized by the internet facility with it. From internet, one can get access of different things like social media, political content, entertainment and many more. Those content creats different effect in our mental state. For example, if a child watchs a video of classroom bulling or any frictional content, he will mimic that in his own life. Therefore, after seeing wrestling and bulling, one young may repeat that behaviour with his classmet. That will result a very unconcionable incident. Therefore, the young student should be not allowed to use the smart phone.
Finally, the young children are allowed to access the smart phone, they will play with it most of the time. That will cause few negative consequences like they will not play and talk with other students/ children, that will hamper his physical condition and social behaviour. Because, if they do not play outdoor game or any physical activity, that will adversely deteriorate his physical development in the young age. Additionaly, the young one will not learn to behave other children, senoirs and teachers, that will also suffer him in his future.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree to allow smart phone to the young student, because, that will hamper his or her study, behaviour and physical development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16578947368 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67895641607 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494736842105 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8942600108 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4761904762 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0952380952 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263587263057 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0975691166699 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659180899104 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165338193153 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314074972614 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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