Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Education is an important part of our lives as it affects our future. Although some people adamantly claim that parents should notify their children using any incentive, others disagree. Personally, I am on the belief that we must be so careful about the behaviors embedding in kids' minds. I prefer not to offer money to my child to study better. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, offering money as an impetus would merely perpetuate inappropriate habits in the children such as making a way of thinking that relates everyone to money. So it would be probable to ask money for each task doing in the home which is so terrible. Adolescents are like a young tree which will shape in any direction we direct it. Therefore, it would be so crucial to be so cautious about our behaviors and words. For instance, I have a son who is 8 years old. He pays attention a lot to my words and especially my promises. Two weeks ago, I promised to give him some money if he does well in the class. I think that it was the worst idea which I have ever had since it destroyed my son's thinking about money. He thought that he deserved money for each duty like going to market or cleaning the rooms. As I saw the detrimental consequences of this idea, I talked to him and explained the situation, and asked him to forget my words.
Second, the idea of money instead of a good grade in the class will lower the value of education. It's so important to esteem learning process and know its necessity, and then talk about it with our children. The youngsters are enough ingenious to perceive if we describe it clearly. For example, I can remember when I was a little girl and I wanted to go to school for the first time, my parents talked to me for hours to inform me about the necessity of knowledge and education. Now, I am a graduate student and I remember those words so clear. So it is so essential for a young person to know about the education properly to have permanent incentives not by offering money which is a temporary and transitory motive.
All in all, education is so important and we must not spoil it by offering money as it makes bad habits in kids and it decreases the value of learning.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.41346153846 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55819833051 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509615384615 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3303449395 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4545454545 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225151896998 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587121434071 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494376414831 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123518053623 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452788821577 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.3 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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