Some people believe that it is better to live your life to make as much money as you can, while others think it is better to live a relaxing life. Which do you think is better and give examples.
Most of people believe that person should earn as much as more he can. In my opinion i feel it is important to earn money but it should not be that excessively that you start compromising your lifestyle. I feel this way for mainly two main reason which i will explore in the following essay.
First of all i will like to take support of cliche saying but true that health is wealth. this shown you should not compromise your mental peace , health in pursuit of earning money. For instance my uncle saum is a perfect example of this. he used to not take care of his health properly instead he used to be always busy with his business affairs meeting clients, working on the projects and other. he was having a relaxed life always in stress of earning more and more. All was good in initial stage later onwards in his late forty's his health started to get deteriorate and he was having a heart stroke at very small age. he was died in next few years, he earned a lot of money but he was not their to spend or use that money. So i prefer a less stressful life than a hectic day full time running behind money.
Second reason for this is related to adverse effects of not having a lifestyle. when a person is busy earning money he forgets to give proper time to their kids which has dangerous effect in future. Their kids also learn to run behind money and when a person needs support from his kids he is not able to get one because he taught his child to be like that. which results in giving a wrong teaching to your child. For example my neighbours are compelling example of this. he followed a same pattern in turn his child were not feeling attached to their father because he was never their for him whenever he needed he was busy earning money.
In conclusion i feel that it is important to earn money or work for money but also important to have relaxed and good lifestyle because it only thing which can save you from future health issues or disorders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.39945652174 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19583781696 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502717391304 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8565281541 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9444444444 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.5376344086 415% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111383825246 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465752217857 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0440390420172 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895228440557 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303149869755 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 10.9000537634 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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