Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Volunteer job is the important part of society since it helps people to understand the value of providing support to others. However, making it prescribed for youngsters is the different story. Personally, I believe that students from high school should not be required to carry out unpaid service with out-of-pocket expenses. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, young individuals need to concentrate on their lesson, so they can maximize their learning. During high school years, young people confront a huge load of assignments and exams, which signifies they are mainly hectic. However, if these learners are forced to do other things such as volunteer job, they will be significantly sidetracked from their study. As a result, their grade and attendance may diminish. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Last year, when I was senior of high school, members of my school required all students to be involved in unpaid service to graduate the school. Then, I and my classmates spent nearly two weeks to finish this job instead of preparing for final exams. Therefore, some of my classmates failed several exams because of wasting their invaluable time for volunteer job. This example demonstrates the negative impact of impelling pupils to do volunteer job on learners who are busy to learn concepts of academic disciplines.
Secondly, forcing people to do unpaid job might discourage them to be involved this type of activity later on because they cannot comprehend the true value of volunteer job. When teachers or other employees of educational organizations require adolescences to carry out this kind of work, they tend to do it in an unpleasant way such as punishing. Therefore, juveniles might associate the volunteer job with their negative experiences, so they are unlikely to accomplish this job afterwards. For instance, last year, when my teacher start reducing my classmates’ grades for not doing unpaid job, my study partners mentioned that they lost their opportunity to receive fine scores by virtue of unpaid job. Furthermore, they claimed that they will never interfere with unpaid job anymore. To sum up, requiring young people to achieve so-called volunteer job may daunt these juveniles to do these things in the future because of unpleasant result.
In summation, in my humble opinion, I believe that learners must not be forced to carry out unpaid jobs. This is because learners are busy, studying their lesson, and this type of authority will discourage youngsters to do these things voluntarily at the later time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i feel, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19392523364 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8231444831 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516355140187 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1370667461 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.380952381 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170838123833 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576005296556 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043123813103 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122411082362 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475647358409 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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